What is Friendship?
Friendship is company
Friendship is love
Friendship is honesty
Friendship is worth a shoulder to
lean on
Friendship is support that will
never leave your side
When we need each other we will
always be there
Friendship is growth till d end
Friends is admiring the flaws of
my life
Friendship is the bond that we
have for each other
Friendship is facing the battle
of darkness together
Friendship is never betraying
each other.
This is a great poem, but I feel you can expand on it a bit more. Maybe make a second stanza discussing a personal friendship you had and discuss how this friendship affected your life personally. Also maybe a stanza on a bad friendship you had with a "fake friend" could give your audience a basis on what a toxic friendship could do to a person, both physically and emotionally. Otherwise this is a great poem!
ReplyDeleteThank you for the feed back this really help
DeleteThis is a great poem, but I would suggest you to expand more explaining about the importance of having friendship. Some experience you had in life and that impacted you personally. The consequences of having bad friendships. Also, I think you should add the types of friendships and which one goes with you. Until now you are doing well, great poem.
ReplyDeleteThank you as well and I'll
DeleteI like this poem also because it focuses on an unconditional love of a true friend. My comment is that you don't have to mention "friendship is" in every single line in the beginning. We understand that the main theme is friendship so there is no need to be so repetitive. Maybe you can write " Friendship is" and add 3 adjectives. Then write Friendship is again.
ReplyDeleteFor example:
Friendship is company, love, and honesty.
Friendship is a shoulder to lean on.
Support that will never lave your side.
When we need each other,
We will always be there.
Friendship is growth til the end.
& so on.
Then at the end, you can write as the last line
Friendship is...
Or as the last line you can write,
What is friendship to you?
I like your work though. It's really nice and enlightening.
Thank you for the feed and I will make these changes
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